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    dots Submission Name: walked awaydots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1409
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 956



    Description:
       This is once again, all true, the closest I can get to writing my own feelings and actions is to be the third person.

    The reading is a little different than most peices I have ever written as each small stanza is virtually self contained and stands alone without following the flow of the next


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    dotswalked awaydots
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    He walked away from empty lives
    To find the knowledge buried deep inside

    A need arose to find a way
    To heal corruption born of lies

    A soul can only fight so hard
    Against the forked tongues of the sick
    Unknowns beshrew the open mind
    Out there's the door to set it free


    He stands alone and breathes the air
    Freedoms sapor seems so strange



    Hearing no malefic words
    His head feels barren
    Knowing destiny's not set
    Occults the futures path

    And always will the time be true
    And always he knows something new
    Without, within an upturned smile
    Without corruptions guttural crow


    With minds jetsam floating all around
    Exempt of odious fleeting thoughts
    He walks alone, his head held high
    He walks
    To leave his past behind




    Submitted on 2006-06-13 18:52:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reminded me of the U2 song Walk On. I enjoyed this piece for in a sense I can relate to the persona. I like the idea you mentioned in the description that each stanza is seperate in a sense and doesn't flow into the other. Yet while reading this I didn't really get that, they did seem connected to me in their own right.

    I enjoyed reading this

    Keep up the good work

    Be happy

    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]


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