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    dots Submission Name: Broken Knucklesdots
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    Author: JetPilot
    ASL Info:    18/m/ont
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 46/30/15
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Description:
       Spelling is probably really bad, I just wrote this like 5 mintues ago, and just read it over... needed to vent.


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    dotsBroken Knucklesdots
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    I can feel my blood starting to boil
    and I take everything out on my wall
    even though it's never done anything to hurt me,
    other then break my knuckles.
    I have never been so pissed in my life
    How can you not understand where I am coming from.
    It's a guilt game, you and I both know it.
    So what do we do now?
    Hold our heads up and try to look for a better day?
    Obviously it will come...
    so I guess I'll just wait,
    Until the fever subsides,
    and my blood cools down
    and my head clears out,
    and my knuckles heal up.
    I guess I'll just wait until
    the next time I get pissed
    for reasons that maybe shouldn't matter
    but matter to me anyways.
    I hate these fucking games.
    So if it's easiest,
    I give up,
    I'll take the path of least resistance.
    I'll just wait until the day you fuck up,
    so you can take my heart,
    And take it as far away as you possibly can
    cause I'll never want to see you again.




    Submitted on 2006-06-13 20:06:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Angry..yet depressing..Looks like you were fustrated as hell. I've been there, I have a punching bag, but I much rather prefer a wall. Its a nice let out of anger..I guess. But whoever is hurting you, don't let them know it, because they will know what gets you down and out, and they'll take advantage of that feeling..that power to make helpless and angry..

    Anywho this was ann honest piece, no sugar coated cover up..Its just straight out what you feel or felt. I liked it a lot, keep your head up. Take care!

    Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      thats cool. we all need to vent sometimes.
    if i may suggesst, if its a habit for you to beat up your wall, that you get a punching bag. who ever it was that got you that mad, they will stuff up, but the importaint thing to remember is dont kick them while they are down. its not worth sinking that low.

    i sound a thousand years old when i say that, and its hard to do, i know, but honestly, try it.

    the spelling wasnt that bad.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      Venting is always good but we must remember to vent in the right way.
    I used to beat up walls and after about fifteen brojen knuckles I finally figured out a beeter way to vent. I purchased a punching bag and wore it out in less than a year.
    I assume this is about your girlfriend. I can relate to that but it has been twenty five years since I was single but I remember t well.

    I find that your write is good for you and it was needed for your emotional well being. A wall can't hit back but it sure in the hell can cause some pain.

    Hopefully this has depleted some of your anger.

    Nicely done

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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