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Submission Name: I will not lose you now dots

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Author:	sunset
ASL Info:	21/F/Melb, Australia
Elite Ratio:	4.45 - 76/46/32
Words:	134

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1113
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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I will not lose you now dots

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In the sunlight of your eyes
Close this day with a kiss
You know every part of me
You hold me with such clarity
And I am naked before you
I have nothing left to give you
When you hold me close
And tears rain from your eyes
I know not of love or hate
I do not understand your fear
Inside I am screaming at you
But my hands are helpless
I will hold on to you
And grip with my every breath
So that I do not lose you
Not today or any other
I ask you to stay with me
Through the nights and the day
Because we are something special
That cannot be ignored or explained
We circle around our destiny
And I will not lose you now

Submitted on 2006-06-13 20:50:01 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I love the title of this

"I will not lose you now"
It is so simple, strong, and desperate.

The lines I like the best are
"You hold me with such clarity"
and
"But my hands are helpless"

I feel they are the most powerful.

Well I'm sorry I'm not more helpful, but I did like the poem.

----kim
| Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.