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    dots Submission Name: All I Want...dots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 595
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    Bytes: 680



    Description:
       This is my latest one, but it has been a while since I wrote it. This isn't really all that good, but it was my way of venting and calming myself. Enjoy...


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    dotsAll I Want...dots
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    I lie in my bed, scared and alone,
    With nothing left to calm my mind.
    All I want is the past to be gone,
    Instead the past is all I find.

    Like a ghost it hanuts my days,
    Invading my thoughts and dreams.
    Making me suffer in horrible ways,
    Reality is no longer what it seems.

    Around every corner its waits and waits,
    Plotting the next move to make,
    To flash those memories I love to hate,
    And laugh as I weep and shake.

    The evil that lives within my mind,
    Will never leave me alone.
    This evil is all I seem to find.
    All I want is for the past to be gone.




    Submitted on 2006-06-14 08:00:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of a peice I wrote a while ago called unwelcome friend...
    The only suggestion is the repetion of evil in thelast stanza... try to find another word....
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the depth this poem has. Knowing that reality is a joke, and having nothing left to numb the pain of memories you wish you didn't have. . . You portrayed it quite beautifully. You have a few spelling errors, but it seems like those are due to rushing. Other than that, I see nothing wrong with this poem. ^.^ Keep them coming!

    ~ DC~
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by darkness child | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really really touching, because i guess you can say that i can relate to it.. as well as others.. the only thing is that you put 'its' just drop the s.....greta work!!!
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by spanishvampress | [ Reply to This ]


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