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    dots Submission Name: It's Now My Time To Diedots

    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       About someone being thankful for the world they're about to leave.

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    dotsIt's Now My Time To Diedots

    Farewell to smaller simple things
    farewell to spacious sky
    farewell to dew drops on the grass
    It's now my time to die.

    I'll remember you, the blushing rose
    I'll remember you, the morn
    I'll remember you, the robin, red
    When I've left this thundering storm

    I'll miss you stars that shine at night
    I'll miss you butterfly
    I'll miss the ever-grinning moon
    It's time I said goodbye

    Goodbye to you, the noble horse
    goodbye to gentle cow
    goodbye to lowlies in the grass
    I think my time is now.

    Forever gone my rasping breath
    forever gone my eyes
    forever gone my fading form
    It's now my time to die

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      This has such an excellent structure, and has great rythmn and rhyme! It is such a difficult subject to pull off a plausible verse or poem about, and yet you have done it marvelously! The Victorian way is to mourn death, although it is celebrated by many of different faiths, as a celebration of one's life and of passing to a better, spiritual world. You have addressed the subject of life ending with honor, yet in a spirit of celebrating having lived. Amazing, and I applaud your skill, your talent, and confidence!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      i like no love this poem it is very good. very pure and straightforward. i can not wait to read more of your poems.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]
      Frank is right ... just Excellent. I can never judge your writing Superb is all I have to say.
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by premofcal | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why but I really like the poems with a simple yet deep message like this. They just seem to strike a chord deep within. And of course like always the rhyming is great and the flow is smooth. Good job. I enjoy reading your stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by bgmullet | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is superb. The form, structure, rhythmn and rhyme is a perfect. The repetition makes the whole thing just zip off the tongue and the whole thing runs away with you.

    Excellent - and I don't say that very often !

    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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