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    dots Submission Name: Queen of the Nightdots

    Author: ConScribe
    ASL Info:    19/M/Tucson,AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.11 - 262/360/143
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsQueen of the Nightdots

    Queen of the Night

    The desert queen takes her wild thorn throne for a night,
    spreading the petals of her moon to the flashing
    of southwest stars and disposable cameras.
    Her flower collects sightseers and ants with its perfume
    as the fire bugs of the desert begin their wait
    for her fruit to form from beneath her floral figure and fall to them as food.
    This is her night, the one and only of the year,
    where she will be seen as a demigoddess of the desert
    raising her rays to the purple clouds of a distant monsoon
    from behind the shadows of the creosotes,
    living in her spotlife till her apex wilts at sunrise.

    Submitted on 2006-06-14 12:45:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... intriguing... weirdly sexual... in like, the hippie "Mother Nature" kind of way! This poem is well-written, the imagery is really great, and I was surprised (pleasantly) to see disposable cameras (so un-romantique!) amidst the desert and the flower and the firebugs and the moon... :) great write!!
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by Kristen Gudsnuk | [ Reply to This ]

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