High School
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High School
It's all been one big lie, a conspiracy intertwined. Words that ran on for days, all going in different ways. A connection, I thought we all had, Oops, I guess that was my bad. We fall apart, one by one and at the end, we discover it has just begun. We did our final laps, and thankfully, threw our caps. Tears rolled down so many faces, for we all are destined for different places. As the doors began to close, and the emotions arose, the laughter faded and all became very jaded. Some are there others, are only God knows where. While the rest are left behind to straighten out all the bindes. Goodbye and Farewell. |
Submitted on 2006-06-14 18:20:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Hahaha That was good, I don't really know what High School is like personally, but based on what I've seen on TV and in movies and heard from parents, you got it about right. The confusion, the delusion, the highs and lows, the soap opera, the teenagery-ness, and all topped off with a farewell, and you didn't do bad with the light rhyming, either, still with a little characteristic freestyle in there. Pretty good, Kim. I don't have any suggestions, just thought I'd let you know I'm still a fan of your style. You've got plenty of other followers of your work to give lots of help, I' m sure. Shalom ~Skyniffer~ | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ] | KIMBRE RAIN! THIS WAS INSANE! | In a good way. You just put that "end of highschool, start of 'real life'" into a very good write. Somewhat heartwrenching and somewhat inspiring. Yes, your old chums will go, some will stay...some will never be heard from again and some will remain lifelong friends. Excellent write, both technically speaking and emotionally speaking. Nice job and congrats on graduating! Whoooooo-hooooooo!  | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ] | This is really awesome | You did a great take on what it feels like to leave behind school life and venture forth into the real world I really Liked this And I also Congratulate you on Graduating I wish you nothing but the best for the fuure!!! God Bless Please Keep In Touch Ron | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | Ugh. I still have to go through that . |  ! And I have no interest in doing so. This was sad. I can't imagine leaving the school, especially my friends and the ... might as well admit ... the teachers. You managed to put a lot of emotions in this one. Happy Graduation, and good luck in the "real life"Abbas | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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