CINQUAIN (sing-KANE) A five-line stanza of syllabic verse, the successive lines containing two, four, six, eight and two syllables. The cinquain, based on the Japanese haiku, was an innovation of the American poet, Adelaide Crapsey.
Nice piece. The count is perfect. Um although I don't share your same religion, I can still say this was a great short piece. The picture scared me, lol, but it matched the poem to a tee. *shudders from the picture* I could go into a long discussion on religion, but I'll keep my opinions to myself this time, If you wanna know them, just message me. Religion is just difficult for me...ya know? Its based on faith, believing in something you can't see, yet "some" feel, I'm not part of that "some". Anywho, great piece.
This write I really like The picture you included with this matches the write perfectly I like the style you wrote this one in and I plan to write my own cinquain shortly A very powerful message stated brilliantly with your words God Bless Ron
Ok, well you asked in your description whether the syllable count in your cinquain was right... Graeme answered that it's supposed to be 2, 4, 6, 8, 2-- not 2, 3, 7, 9, 2... so to get this right you'd have to add a syllable to your second line and shave off a syllable each in your third and fourth lines. With slight editing this could be easily done... for example:
Jesus Lion and lamb Gracing earth in glory Awestruck, amorous, amazing My Lord
What do you think?
As to the poem's message it carries a great universal theme that a lot of people can identify with. In such a tightly controlled form such as this clarity and brevity is everything and you've distilled it here with precision.
Like Graeme also said, "amorous" caught me slightly off as well, yet it works as another meaning for "loving"... it just has connotations of "lust", y'know?