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    dots Submission Name: Grass between my toesdots
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    Author: snow
    ASL Info:    15 female NZ!
    Elite Ratio:    1.82 - 6/11/8
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsGrass between my toesdots
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    Green spears struggle to live as i stamp and prance on their pointed heads.In frenzied happiness I struggle to live for a breath comes hard in forgotten dance.

    Stained on my feet is their green blood mashed in my toes I grin.
    And let me run free between the stems of lovely friends where rays of light come leaping down in multicoloured ways and flinged on my face they stay for a some way.Before they wear off in rain.




    Submitted on 2006-06-14 23:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really cute!! I like it...I don't read many happy poems and this one really made me smile! I have to agree with elseibi the "green spears" was great I like it. Very good poem :)

    ~javajunkie~

    p.s. when your running just don't foget to stop and take a breath :) hehe
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by javajunkie | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds very cute and I actually think it's quite perfect(But there is no such thing as true 'Perfection') BUt still it's very good. I don't have much to say other then it speaks the way of freedom and I enjoyed reading this.
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Triflingblood | [ Reply to This ]
      this is such a cute poem, you made me smile with your use of imagery and i love the "green spear" grass stalks. great job.
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      your too happy
    stop
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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