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    dots Submission Name: Lady Freestylesdots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1130
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1361

       topic goes both ways like im sure it does for most guys
    i love to hate em but hate not to lovin em
    ITs all fiction with a personal touch

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    dotsLady Freestylesdots

    IM thinking and my mind is runnin like im on the brink of existin
    but im finding no sign for persistin
    im forgetin to check the score
    without a check I will always be poor
    like without respect there are no open doors
    in the maze of society I am trying to be while lying about what I see
    is it just a phase or should I put a stop to this gaze or like a lawyer I should drop the case or take the plea
    and not have to face inner doubts with no money to feed not even a babies mouth
    let alone the ladies instead I clean them out
    of home like a fiend I turn em out
    forget the rest and not listen to their shouts and tell them im out

    So much for my thoughts to face
    of one to hold onto but im caught like a shoelace
    under your shoe I think I im stained forever blue
    without the will to claim or still remember you
    and forget each screw and the pain that stil contd and grew
    into this verse I spit and shatter my words
    not like it matters but its after the first curse
    where you walked away and dropped your Gucci purse
    feelin battered but who was sadder
    my feeling to burst was worse
    like when I was in your pussy but after you said I was your first
    but u could barely handle my thirst

    Submitted on 2006-06-15 00:36:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok this one was def for the guys, i am totaly conffused, maybe you could explain, it flowed nice tho ha ha,
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]

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