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    dots Submission Name: Salt Waterdots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 933
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1032



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    I try to hold my emotions within myself. But often my eyes betray me, and there's nothing I can do.


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    dotsSalt Waterdots
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    Someone once asked me
    What one thing I couldn't live
    Without
    I told them I couldn't live
    Without my tears

    I cry for good and evil
    I cry for love and hate
    I cry for my friends
    As I cry for my enemies
    And for myself

    I've shed tears of happiness
    And tears of deepest sorrow
    I cry for the strength of others
    Because I know that
    I might never be so strong

    I've cried for my own nostalgia
    Wept for memories I try
    So hard to forget
    And I cry for ever wanting
    To never remember

    I weep defiance and resolve
    Because tears are not weakness
    Those who hide them
    Are hiding their own weaknesses and fears
    And it feels so good to cry

    I cry for longing and having
    I cry for melancholy and grey
    For black and for white
    I cry for right and wrong
    And I cry the bitterest tears for myself




    Submitted on 2006-06-15 00:53:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      People need to realize it's okay to cry. And in many cases, it's okay. so i think maybe this poem needs to be mass produced, like a virus. show up in your email. call you up at 8 oclock in the morning like a telemarketer. pop up on every blackberry. hand delivered to your mailbox. and everyone would read this at the same time. and everyone would cry. a good cry. for everything that happened to them this week. and i bet it would be the purest, most beautiful bond the world has ever shared.


    maybe i just got a little carried away. but it's so very true. and i wish more people (even myself) could look at crying in the same manner that you do.

    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Kalidoscopeeyes | [ Reply to This ]
      It takes a certain kind of strength to be able to cry when you need to.
    I really enjoyed this poem alot.
    Most of the time I found myself thinking, good for you.
    I wish I could cry when I need to.
    Thanks for sharing, write on.
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by DisilusndDreamr | [ Reply to This ]
      I do think in some situations the people who cry come out stronger than those who bottle it up.
    This is an original write, I've never read or thought about crying being something you couldn't live without.
    If you don't mind I have a suggestion concerning the first stanza.
    "Someone once asked me
    What one thing I couldn't live
    Without" doesn't make sense to me. I think either after "what" or after "without" you need to place was/is (depending on the tense).
    I enjoyed this write, and the ending touched me because of the truth in it; I could relate to it!

    Thanks for sharing,
    Nicola
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]


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