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    dots Submission Name: BLUE JEAN BOYdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsBLUE JEAN BOYdots
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    all those words in your head-
    why were they never said?
    you weren’t sure, is that why-
    were you just far too shy?

    now she’ll never get to know
    of the love you didn’t show:
    of the thoughts kept inside,
    feelings you tried to hide-

    yet, you lived for those nights
    when you’d be by her side-
    there was no greater joy
    than those nights that she called you her blue jean boy…

    CHORUS:

    blue jean boy,you’re playing a game-
    but you don’t know the rules
    and you don’t know the name;
    blue jean boy, you were just her toy-
    still you treasure those nights she called you
    her blue jean boy…

    do you miss her now she’s gone-
    does your song go on and on?
    did she only hurt your pride-
    does your pain go deep inside?

    will you say another word-
    is there no more to be heard?
    and though you know you couldn’t win,
    would you do the same again?

    yet, you lived for those nights
    when you’d be by her side-
    there was no greater joy
    than those nights that she called you her blue jean boy…

    (Chorus)




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      Like most of my lyrics on this board, this one was originally written as a song and, should you care to, you can hear me perform it by clicking on the link below

    http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7506134

    If you do have the patience, I would be very interested to know what you think of it.

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one heck of a write
    This has great lyrical content
    I would love to hear this write matched with music
    You definately have a talent for lyrics!!!
    Great Job with this
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      As an experianced lyric writer, I would say that these lyrics seemed to me a bit cheesy. The rhyming scheme doesn't seem to fit with your words, and on top of that I got the impression that you tried too hard to rhyme. With a lot more work, (and less rhymes) these could be some really great lyrics.

    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE SONG!

    Nice words too!

    Flawless and well, well written.

    Three thumbs up for his one!


    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I like this....
    It feels like a person I know or have known.
    Why is it that we are so afraid to love. so afraid to put ourselves out there just to feel tenderness.

    So many opportunities waisted. So much time passes through our fingers like water and sand.

    When the bitterness of lonliness chooses to visit, he should always come to an open door
    because we in frailty and feebleness perpetually run from amore.

    Keep lovin and livin life
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by smalltown | [ Reply to This ]


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