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    dots Submission Name: They Saydots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I saw my ex last night...everyone tells me that I need to move on, but I sometimes have to wonder if these people really know what love is like...I don't believe that you can give up on it so easily...


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    They say that life goes on without you
    But I have to wonder if they really know.
    Because this emptiness took root inside my heart
    The moment I watched you go.

    They say I have to move on, and let you go
    But I wonder if they know how this feels?
    You were the only person that I've ever truly loved
    The only thing I felt was real.

    They say I have to leave it alone
    I'd have to ask, who are they to tell me this?
    Did they feel this pain in my heart,
    When I gave you that last kiss?

    They say that this is all for the best
    That I am better off alone than with you
    And I tell them it just doesn't matter,
    I'll do whatever I have to do.

    They say I shouldn't waste my time
    And really, I knew this from the start.
    But how are you supposed to live without
    The one who holds your heart?




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      Love has nothing to do with what is going on with you now. Love is the mutual feeling between you and your fellow. He has moved on and so there is no hope. Because the love has died. Love can die. It sometimes doesn't last forever. It is like hapiness. Maybe I am confusing a little. My biggest point is that you would be happier if you got your job, started taking classes, and moved on with your life. You can do better than living from paycheck to paycheck. But it is up to you. I liked the poem.
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I must disagree with Jazmine about this. I don't believe love dies. I believe it is always there. It may not always be felt and it may be hidden by other negative feelings like anger.....but I do believe it is always there. I really liked this poem. It had good rhyme and you totally stood strong with your love and faith for him and how you believe you will be together with him again. I'm proud of you. I'm not saying that it's a good thing that you have to go through pain. Remember what I said at your house about going through trials and pain? Sometimes....you just have to suffer to be happy. You have to sacrifice to gain. But as long as you stay strong and believe....then you will get happiness and peace. Now some may say that this has to work both ways....that he has to feel the same way as you do. Maybe this is true. Actually....I know so. The thing is....to make him realize what he is missing out on. YOu know he's not happy, his sister knows, [censored]....even I know! lol The thing is....I believe his love for you is still there....it just needs to be fired up again. That [censored] snuffed it out! But I honestly believe it's still there. Now...you must find a way to make him realize it. Or maybe he just has to do it himself. Who knows? But like I said....stay strong....you have so far. Much love........

    Steven
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you're going through. "they" don't know what they're talking about :)
    I hope time eases your ache.
    Great poem, don't change a thing.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by DisilusndDreamr | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm...very thought provoking. Sometimes "they" know us so well and have the right to say such things about "us and them" because "they" know our types and...more importantly..."us".

    Therefore...whos word do you trust? "Them" or the one you think is "the one"...or your heart?

    Guess it depends a lot on how much you trust "them" and what your heart says, eh?

    HA!

    Quite a quandry your write depicts...one of the more prevalent topics written about here, but put in that Raivnistic way.

    Nice to read a write like this with your 'touch' on it.

    Anyway...good luck and thanks for shairing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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