Love Kills

Author: Mr. Creep ASL Info:    16. Female. Here Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112 Words: 63

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Love Kills

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silently slipping away, shes lying on the ground. With a knife in her right hand, she never made a sound. She stiched her lips together, sick of her own screams. He took away her decency, when he stole away her dreams. Silently she slipped away, she never made a sound. A knife deep in her flesh, lying lifeless on the ground...

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sad and lovely. could dying be that lovely. i guess it can by the way u described it. u made her dying moment immortal. it is an accomplishment and original.

| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]

i thought it was ...well written and very descriptive...but...the content was too gory for me but it was a good write. it has a very good meaning and u went about it the rite way. it was very original. i made my feel sad for the person but wonder why they couldnt get over the heartbreak...but i guess that happens sometime. good job and keep writing Just Me/Caotic

| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

i like this alot...i can relate to this especially since i just got dumped...yeah he was an [censored]...its short but it doesnt drag on...it says alot..it has alot of emotions behind it and you can feel them when you read it....good job

| Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ]

No need to apologize for the length (or lack thereof). I love it as it is. I always try to explain to people how love... well, kills.... and they just don't get it. Maybe they should read this Great job -nikkki

| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

This write is really deep To me you are describbing someone who has been abused or molested probably by a close relative and she has battled against the pain of this abuse for a long time and finally she belives she cant take anymore You really captured your theme well here as the emotions I got from this were severe Excellent Job!!! God Bless Ron And Welcome to Elite Skills I hope this site brings you all the happiness it has brought to me Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

the only problem i have with this is that it is too short. i thought itd go on. meh. i liked it. nice work. (i suck at these things.)

| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by taramarie | [ Reply to This ]

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