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    dots Submission Name: Love Killsdots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 1188
    Average Vote:    4.6667
    Bytes: 421



    Description:
       yea. sorry its to short, i no it could have been longer. shit happens you guys but you just have to face the facts, suicide isent the best way to die even though ive tryed many times. :(


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    dotsLove Killsdots
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    silently slipping away,
    shes lying on the ground.
    With a knife in her right hand,
    she never made a sound.

    She stiched her lips together,
    sick of her own screams.
    He took away her decency,
    when he stole away her dreams.

    Silently she slipped away,
    she never made a sound.
    A knife deep in her flesh,
    lying lifeless on the ground...




    Submitted on 2006-06-15 11:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sad and lovely. could dying be that lovely. i guess it can by the way u described it. u made her dying moment immortal. it is an accomplishment and original.
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought it was ...well written and very descriptive...but...the content was too gory for me but it was a good write. it has a very good meaning and u went about it the rite way. it was very original. i made my feel sad for the person but wonder why they couldnt get over the heartbreak...but i guess that happens sometime. good job and keep writing

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    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot...i can relate to this especially since i just got dumped...yeah he was an [censored]...its short but it doesnt drag on...it says alot..it has alot of emotions behind it and you can feel them when you read it....good job
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ]
      No need to apologize for the length (or lack thereof).
    I love it as it is.
    I always try to explain to people how love... well, kills.... and they just don't get it.
    Maybe they should read this

    Great job
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This write is really deep
    To me you are describbing someone who has been abused or molested probably by a close relative and she has battled against the pain of this abuse for a long time and finally she belives she cant take anymore
    You really captured your theme well here as the emotions I got from this were severe
    Excellent Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    And Welcome to Elite Skills I hope this site brings you all the happiness it has brought to me
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      the only problem i have with this is that it is too short.
    i thought itd go on.
    meh.
    i liked it.
    nice work.
    (i suck at these things.)
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by taramarie | [ Reply to This ]


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