silently slipping away,
shes lying on the ground.
With a knife in her right hand,
she never made a sound.
She stiched her lips together,
sick of her own screams.
He took away her decency,
when he stole away her dreams.
Silently she slipped away,
she never made a sound.
A knife deep in her flesh,
lying lifeless on the ground...
| sad and lovely. could dying be that lovely. i guess it can by the way u described it. u made her dying moment immortal. it is an accomplishment and original.||| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ] || i thought it was ...well written and very descriptive...but...the content was too gory for me but it was a good write. it has a very good meaning and u went about it the rite way. it was very original. i made my feel sad for the person but wonder why they couldnt get over the heartbreak...but i guess that happens sometime. good job and keep writing|
|| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ] || i like this alot...i can relate to this especially since i just got dumped...yeah he was an [censored]...its short but it doesnt drag on...it says alot..it has alot of emotions behind it and you can feel them when you read it....good job||| Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ] || No need to apologize for the length (or lack thereof).|
I love it as it is.
I always try to explain to people how love... well, kills.... and they just don't get it.
Maybe they should read this
|| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ] || This write is really deep|
To me you are describbing someone who has been abused or molested probably by a close relative and she has battled against the pain of this abuse for a long time and finally she belives she cant take anymore
You really captured your theme well here as the emotions I got from this were severe
And Welcome to Elite Skills I hope this site brings you all the happiness it has brought to me
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
|| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] || the only problem i have with this is that it is too short.|
i thought itd go on.
i liked it.
(i suck at these things.)
|| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by taramarie | [ Reply to This ] |