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Love Kills


Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 63
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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Average Vote:    4.6667
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yea. sorry its to short, i no it could have been longer. shit happens you guys but you just have to face the facts, suicide isent the best way to die even though ive tryed many times. :(


Love Kills



silently slipping away,
shes lying on the ground.
With a knife in her right hand,
she never made a sound.

She stiched her lips together,
sick of her own screams.
He took away her decency,
when he stole away her dreams.

Silently she slipped away,
she never made a sound.
A knife deep in her flesh,
lying lifeless on the ground...




Submitted on 2006-06-15 11:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sad and lovely. could dying be that lovely. i guess it can by the way u described it. u made her dying moment immortal. it is an accomplishment and original.
| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
  i thought it was ...well written and very descriptive...but...the content was too gory for me but it was a good write. it has a very good meaning and u went about it the rite way. it was very original. i made my feel sad for the person but wonder why they couldnt get over the heartbreak...but i guess that happens sometime. good job and keep writing

Just Me/Caotic
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this alot...i can relate to this especially since i just got dumped...yeah he was an [censored]...its short but it doesnt drag on...it says alot..it has alot of emotions behind it and you can feel them when you read it....good job
| Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ]
  No need to apologize for the length (or lack thereof).
I love it as it is.
I always try to explain to people how love... well, kills.... and they just don't get it.
Maybe they should read this

Great job
-nikkki
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  This write is really deep
To me you are describbing someone who has been abused or molested probably by a close relative and she has battled against the pain of this abuse for a long time and finally she belives she cant take anymore
You really captured your theme well here as the emotions I got from this were severe
Excellent Job!!!
God Bless
Ron

And Welcome to Elite Skills I hope this site brings you all the happiness it has brought to me
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  the only problem i have with this is that it is too short.
i thought itd go on.
meh.
i liked it.
nice work.
(i suck at these things.)
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by taramarie | [ Reply to This ]


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