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Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 921
Average Vote:    4.0000
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I tasted a pineapple the other day
the sweetness and sugar did a jig on my palete
what a strange fruit i thought to myself
so coarse on the outside but inside is oh so good
some people of course are like this
they show a jagged persona that is disliked
but really they are kind and warm
there parents were probably just the same
the apple doesnt fall far from the tree they say
try to get to know the pineapples of the world
they'll are surprising laughable folks

Submitted on 2006-06-15 13:54:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Coarse instead of cource? their parents instead of there? and why are the parents also pinapples if they treat them badly??
other than that, I loved this.. it is a funny little peice that says a lot...
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it. The only thig missing from this poem
is the big happy face. It's a good poem
I really like the apple metaphor.
keep'em comming. The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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