Pineapple

Author: Fraser ASL Info:    26 Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35 Words: 92

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Pineapple

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I tasted a pineapple the other day the sweetness and sugar did a jig on my palete what a strange fruit i thought to myself so coarse on the outside but inside is oh so good some people of course are like this they show a jagged persona that is disliked but really they are kind and warm there parents were probably just the same the apple doesnt fall far from the tree they say try to get to know the pineapples of the world they'll are surprising laughable folks

Submitted on 2006-06-15 13:54:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Coarse instead of cource? their parents instead of there? and why are the parents also pinapples if they treat them badly?? other than that, I loved this.. it is a funny little peice that says a lot...

| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

I like it. The only thig missing from this poem is the big happy face. It's a good poem I really like the apple metaphor. keep'em comming. The Poor Man's Poet.

| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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