with only your lips

Author: mimi ASL Info:    30/f/ny Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111 Words: 72

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with only your lips

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Resuscitating kiss. Chili peppers and sledgehammers, earth shattering, mind blowing, time stopping and nice. Your lips on mine nothing else matters I come alive. You revitalize me. More potent than smelling salts That assaults my senses And breaths life back Into a vacationing heart. While I annualize The reviving touch of your lips to mine, I fall. All you did was kiss me

Submitted on 2006-06-15 15:19:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Such rich imagery. I really enjoyed reading this. It was really cute. The kisses that make the earth shatter, always a good subject for a poem.

| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]

Wow! this is a great poem. I wish I wrote it. I have been writiing about kissing in my works from time to time. But I have never been kissed like that. maybe it'll happen for me one day. Keep'em comming. Untill I read you again, take care. The Poor Man's Poet.

| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

I like the imagery as well, the earth shattering and what not. Chilipeppers and sledgehammers? I wouldn't have used those two analogies, but that is why I suppose we call it art, no?

| Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]

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