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with only your lips


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Description:




with only your lips



Resuscitating kiss.
Chili peppers and
sledgehammers,
earth shattering,
mind blowing,
time stopping and
nice.
Your lips on mine
nothing else
matters
I come alive.
You revitalize me.
More potent than smelling salts
That assaults my senses
And breaths life back
Into a vacationing heart.
While I annualize
The reviving touch of your lips to mine,
I fall.
All you did was kiss me




Submitted on 2006-06-15 15:19:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Such rich imagery. I really enjoyed reading this. It was really cute. The kisses that make the earth shatter, always a good subject for a poem.
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! this is a great poem. I wish I wrote it.
I have been writiing about kissing in my works from time to time. But I have never been kissed like that. maybe it'll happen for me one day.
Keep'em comming. Untill I read you again,
take care. The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the imagery as well, the earth shattering and what not. Chilipeppers and sledgehammers? I wouldn't have used those two analogies, but that is why I suppose we call it art, no?
| Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]


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