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    dots Submission Name: Why I Fightdots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    Bytes: 1367



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    dotsWhy I Fightdots
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    I fight the power
    Cuz the bankers took the Towers
    So my kids can see the flowers
    Without waiting in line for hours
    I stand up in the shower,
    Enjoying the clean water
    While my mind dwells on the wino still needing a quarter.
    For immigrants crossing the border
    Seeking a better life
    Cuz our corporations cut their country's guts out like a knife
    While our politicians use their pain to sow increasing strife
    And what really makes it trife,
    Is they'll never make it right.
    I fight the power cuz it keeps me up at night:
    Police sirens blaring with their red and blue party lights
    They flex capitalist might
    Placing money above everything
    So Enron gets a summons
    But there's cells for every gang
    Not to mention lobbyists ensuring things will never change,
    Legalized bribery,
    But for them its pocket change.
    If money makes the world go round
    I wish it'd stop
    Like bullets in a glock
    That jams in the hands of cops,
    Or like this Dream Deferred for so long that it pops,
    Filled with crack rocks and tear drops and decrepit ghetto blocks.
    I fight the power cuz things are wrong the way they are
    And instead of World War 3 I want humans on Mars.




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      What I like about pieces like this is that it allows the person to perform an effective assertion of ones self. It confronts the face of the situation while gradually and unapologetically making its way towards the root of the problem and what the writer really feels about it. To put it simply, it labels the disease so that you would be able to know how to beat it.

    What's dangerous about this is that it exposes too much of the writer. It has the ability to shamelessly criticize its source with the vindictiveness of the sun. Not that that is a bad thing, it's just that maybe you wouldn't want to be judged on the alternatives you considered or the things you thought about through the whole process.

    But anyway, I think pieces like this are what writers should be proud of. It's a brave thing to face the world around you. But its even braver to do that while facing yourself as well.

    Kudos.
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this just flowed from one thing to the next with such ease and it all just connected so easily. awesome. i like this. i like how it took on the many different forms that the world faces and the people in this world face everyday and every night. brilliant. i like how it shows that this isn't what you want, but its what you have to deal with.

    Zach
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]


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