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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 870
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 459



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    why do you do what you do/
    why do you look just for who/
    can take care of you/
    when I"m the one that do what it do/
    why do you think nothing of me/
    you said you trusted and love me/
    what happen to the love B/
    now you can even hug me/
    oh girl you know that I love you/
    done kissed it and hugged you/
    now who is it, got me sprung, its you/
    got fire on my tongue, its you/




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      I had went through this, I hada friend who led me on to think the same way. It is painful, but you will find a true love in the future. I am married and I just do not have time to talk to that girl. yes she is still at thought, but my life is new. peace and hope you find that love soon. you seem like a nice young man from this piece alone. her lost lol
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by thelastone | [ Reply to This ]
      funny, the one who hurt me. was the one I thought that loved me. Oh well, we all get heartbroken and mature from it, or do we? I am soo lonely Mr lonely just kidding
    Hope you are happy by now.
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      this can be a chours to a song...anyways this was good and short. Like i said i understand although not completey what your going through keep 'em comin.

    DePoetry
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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