WHY AM I HERE? by Psyve

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Author:	Psyve
ASL Info:	53/M/ Bahrain
Elite Ratio:	3.29 - 75/102/60
Words:	72

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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WHY AM I HERE? dots

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although
this is not really
an answer
to the question
you asked me
yesterday,
i know your
question
is one
you must have asked
yourself
on numerous occasions
before…

you know,
kid,
despite everything
richard bach
said to the contrary
on my birthday-
it just struck me,
that the moment
you asked yourself
that one question,
while you were with me-
you were
no longer there,
anyway…

Submitted on 2006-06-16 12:56:31 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
Hey, I quite fancied this. The train of thought and the way you use a conversation-like approach to it really works well.

The ending is excellent, a lovely paradox that shows exactly the state of things and the meaning of the rest of the poem (except the richard bach, I didn't get that)

Very well done, a nice read, great end!

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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