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    dots Submission Name: WHY AM I HERE?dots

    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWHY AM I HERE?dots

    this is not really
    an answer
    to the question
    you asked me
    i know your
    is one
    you must have asked
    on numerous occasions

    you know,
    despite everything
    richard bach
    said to the contrary
    on my birthday-
    it just struck me,
    that the moment
    you asked yourself
    that one question,
    while you were with me-
    you were
    no longer there,

    Submitted on 2006-06-16 12:56:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, I quite fancied this. The train of thought and the way you use a conversation-like approach to it really works well.

    The ending is excellent, a lovely paradox that shows exactly the state of things and the meaning of the rest of the poem (except the richard bach, I didn't get that)

    Very well done, a nice read, great end!

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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