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Grauation Song


Author: giver_of_death
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Please edit it!It goes to the tune of 1985!! I need it in time for grad.Take out as many words as you think need be or add some..switch them..whatever! Pleasse fix it!!


Grauation Song



All the good time
Coming to an end
Going to high school
Is just around the bend

It came so quickley
Grade school came and went
We must remember
All the goos times we spent

-Bridge-
So hide your tears
Say your last goodbyes
Plan for the future
Hope for succesful lives

We want to stay
Not just forget this was
Why can't we just stop...ans bring back

-Chorus-
All the friends, all the memories
Leaving them, becomes reality

All the teachers
Who brought us up so good
Must pass us off
Hoping that they did what they could

-Verse 2-
The way we've known things
10 years have gone
Outgrown it some say
But we know thats all wrong

We fwon't forget
It was much to funn
But knowing it'll end
In the season of sun

-Bridge x1 Chorus x2-




Submitted on 2006-06-16 15:34:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked it....it was nice.....it was cute, but in the same sense as a little kid. I think this type of thing would be best in a poem type of setting, it's not really made for lyrics, unless it were really upbeat acoustic. Otherwise it's pretty good, it has a good way of capturing the feeling right, but it's pretty cliché in parts. Try and capture things in ur work in a totally different sense that no one would expect....like graduation from the viewpoint of the teachers or something....
| Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
  wow a really nice song about graduating man I tell you I just graduated from a private school and it is that much more harder cause everyone is that much more close to eachother and doesn't want to let go that much more but as far as corrections one that I could recomend is on the first verse you could instead of saying

All the good time
Coming to an end
Going to high school
Is just around the bend

All the good time
Coming to an end
Going to high school
And just being friends

but besides that just a couple of spelling errors it was a great tribute to graduating . I have a couple of poems on my page about graduating the names are AH, BUT FOR TWELVE SECONDS I HOLD YOUR HANDS and DON'T YOU REMBER

much LOVE
JAmes
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
  when the time came
I was not ready for pain
I thought this was forever
in my wildest dream to never
really not be together
I wishing my friends the best
in years to come


nice song here and congrads on passing your grade and have a happy summer
| Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]


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