Description: I love this song by Eyrka Badu called Bag Lady. I thought of this months ago, but amazingly I was able to recall it to mind now and post it. it may need a little more work, but I think it came out okay. And yes there is a deep message in the poem. Enjoy.
Bag Lady -------------------------------------------
her life like
an assortment of bags
wear and tears
filled with rags.
She is tired
due to being
purses she struts
more useless items
along the way
to fret over in her
She is a
bag lady toting
here and there
if she will ever live life
free of baggage
and without care.
is there a specific thing that's holding her back or is in general when u say that she can't let go of certain things? this one was good. but kinda weird. but what can i expect from an erykah baddu song? i know i spelled her name wrong but i don't care. good job babe.
Very good -- I enjoyed this one as well. :-D (I'm new here so I'm just trying to find some good writing to critique if I seem stalkerish.) My suggestions for this piece would be to separate separate sentences with at least a semicolon, as here:
She is tired due to being weighed down with mismatched purses; she struts through town.
Its a good thing you remembered this one and wrote it down, I am happy to have read it. It's a good write
The flow was pretty good, it was constant - except for the last line, lol. At least, the way I read it, it would fit better when you leve out 'and'in the last line, and just write a comme or maybe a dah behind baggage.. what else.. o yeah I saw you wrote 'something esle' in stanza three, which I think should be 'something else'
Other than that.. this piece was cool.. like the bags being all the problems in her life, getting more and heavy as it seems. And maybe the 'mismatched purses' being mismatches in lovelife? I dont knwo.. thats just what I got out of it, was that the depe message? cause i am not always good at spotting them..
Some people just don't get to live life, constantly under the stress and pressure of some sort of work. I have not heard the song, but I can not say I didn't like this. The type of situation you have described here is one made by decision. I am sure everyone can take some time out from their shedule to make room for some kind of fun. I really enjoyed the message behind this,
I was thinking of being a bag lady myself one of these days. Of course, it's not as easy as it looks. and the baggage never seems to go away so I don't know if I can hit the streets with any amount of real freedom. I really like this poem Maggie. makes one stop and think about the people living on the street: why they chose it, if they chose it, and how they get along. I think your deeper message is letting go of the baggage that we all carry but I can't help thinking about all the old women out there, just getting by day to day. excellent write.
Sort of in a small way reminds me of Robert Frost " The Armful"
Like the idea, nice little metaphor you got here Mags. A woman burden by many problems in life, continues to be burden through life by problems, whether simple or complex and is unable for whatever reason to let go of these problems. Thats what I have gathered at the most basic level.
Maggie' I really enjoyed this one To me you were speaking of how people dont realize a woman who is homeless also has fears and is only trying to live her life I like how you said she collects things from the so called real world so she can never forget how truly lucky she is for escaping from that hell As I have said before Maggie In my Opinion these People are the real ones who truly know how to express Friendship and Love The so called real world can learn so much from them God Bless Your Friend Always Ron