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    dots Submission Name: Regulardots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1133
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 620



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    dotsRegulardots
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    My name is Anne
    I'm here to serve,
    But boy, you've got a lotta nerve!
    I'm glad to bring you one more beer.
    Your steak's not done? Well hand it here.
    I can get it cooked well-done.
    You need more bread?
    Just watch me run!
    Your coffee will be fresh and steaming,
    And check your silverware - it's gleaming!

    But you crossed the line
    When you grabbed my ass
    And left ten cents next to your glass.
    This ain't my job, this is my life--
    I'm not your waitress - I'm your wife!




    Submitted on 2006-06-17 00:40:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Annie, this was a fun read, it clipped along nicely and then had an unexpected twist at the end.

    Ah yes the lives of wives. thanks~chris .
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! this gave me a good laugh. i wasn't really expecting the whole wife thing at the end. we're so unappreciated and completely underpayed aren't we?

    thanks for the laugh
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      "Well Annie, you made me laugh,
    The poem was serious, also a gaff,
    With words rolling easily from your pen,
    Containing a message for us men."---Good write girl, now I know why my wife gets a little huffy when I pound my knife and fork on the table and ask when supper is going to be ready.
    Hope to see more of your stuff----Mugs---

    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
      hahah. i agree with the other two. love the twist. i wish men would stop treating women for granted! the rhyme and the rhythm sure completes tis fun piece! :)))

    a refreshing read from the general depressing poems around here.

    Rachel
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by wilted_ | [ Reply to This ]


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