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    dots Submission Name: He is always there...dots

    Author: sharu
    ASL Info:    19/female
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 39/46/10
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    dotsHe is always there...dots

    When I woke up today I had worries in my heart,
    I got off from my bed wanting to clear my mind.
    I walked in the garden humming my favorite hymn.
    Just then I hear the signing of the birds and O, how the flowers greeted me!
    What a site it was to see a beautiful day God created for me.
    Then I stopped to think…
    Do the birds ever worry what the day had in store for them?
    Whether the flowers think about how there day would end?
    And just then I heard a voice inside me say,
    “God takes care of everything, My friend”
    The birds don’t know but they believe…
    And the flowers don’t care they have faith.
    ‘cause God takes care of everything!
    Why do we worry when he’s always there
    All we have to do is believe and he’ll take care.
    So leave your worrys aside cause God is always there
    And believe cause God always takes good care…
    I saw Gods beautiful face today,
    And I want you to see him, too.
    So, cast your worries away and count your blessings each day,
    Because you not alone
    He is always there!

    Submitted on 2006-06-17 01:21:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm, I don't know.

    Stuff like this, I always sort of think that if there's a God, and he's a narcissist, he'd love this stuff. It's almost as though you've sacrificed your free will, and thusly your free creative mind to an idea that ultimately results in no creativity. I won't deny it though, the beginning has some promise, sort of a transcendental purely emotional garden-walk sort of thing, and there are some very uplifting, beautiful sentences in the first few lines.
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]
      it's not a great write but it's ok. Kinda Redundant but, I can't really stand religion in the first place... Too... Praisy in my opinion. So yeah, I guess it's just me. Good Write

    - Kyle
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a fairly good write, I'm not really religious at all, I cant really believe in something that doesnt believe in me, but who am I to judge someone's faith...
    Back to the poem, in some places it seems a bit jumbled, and there are a few spelling mistakes in there, but with a quick revision I'm sure you can fix them up.
    Well done, and keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
    You worded this one perfectly
    I couldnt have said this better myself
    You took all the facts of God and showed People that with Belief all fears will disapate
    I know this as a fact because it has worked for me
    The Lord has blessed me and rescued me from a life of sheer hell
    The only reason I write is to let others know how beautiful Life is with The Lord in your Life
    Excellent Job
    I am making this a Favorite!!!
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I love religous poems or storys. I especially like how you started out walking through the garden worrying. And how you incoporated that verse.
    25"Therefore I tell you, do not worry about your life, what you will eat or drink; or about your body, what you will wear. Is not life more important than food, and the body more important than clothes? 26Look at the birds of the air; they do not sow or reap or store away in barns, and yet your heavenly Father feeds them. Are you not much more valuable than they? 27Who of you by worrying can add a single hour to his life[a]?
    28"And why do you worry about clothes? See how the lilies of the field grow. They do not labor or spin. 29Yet I tell you that not even Solomon in all his splendor was dressed like one of these.

    It's a beautiful piece keep writting
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]

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