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    dots Submission Name: The Editordots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       This came to mind right after I kinda harshly critiqued a poem written by someone who I am sure is a perfectly nice fellow. Guilty conscience maybe?


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    I can be an editor
    And I can edit evermore.
    Red pen in hand, I'll rip to shreds
    All your darling's pretty heads.
    I'll calmly slash your words and lines,
    While sipping on a nice red wine.
    But my own words you'll never see,
    Cause you might do the same to me!




    Submitted on 2006-06-17 10:23:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hahaha, I love the note of hypocrisy you have here, how the editor is quick to judge everyone's poems, but when it comes to his, he's afraid to be criticized. As for you criticizing a poem, I don't know what you said, and I hope it wasn't harsh, but if the person is afraid of constructive criticism, maybe he shouldn't pst his poems on ES.com. I love how the image of the write is someone who is scribbling, and scribbling away lines, never appreciating or noticing the good parts of the poem to congratulate."Red pen in hand, I'll rip to shreds
    All your darling's pretty heads.
    I'll calmly slash your words and lines,"
    Were my favorite lines, but again my favorite lines of poem was how he/she says that she would never want somone to criticize he/she's poem in case that they get criticized the samer way. A very good write indeed, and by the looks of this poem, I say that you've got nothing to worry about.
    Peace,love,euphoria,
    Aya
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm absolutely loving the indirect metaphor with the pen as your sword. Very clever. I can't really make any suggestions, because I think it's quite nice the way you've put it together. Perhaps the person you "harshly critiqued," as you said, will understand your "guilty conscience." If meant as a form of apology, it's very creative!
    -Syd
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Otter Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      well you have a spelling mistake here and the verse doesnt flow as well as it should and....
    ..joking..

    nice short poem..
    i like the rhymes..
    its a fun little poem.. thats all

    shaun
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      I can be an editor
    And I can edit evermore.
    Red pen in hand, I'll rip to shreds
    All your darling's pretty heads.
    I'll calmly slash your words and lines,
    While sipping on a (fine) red wine.
    But my own words you'll never see,
    Cause you might do the same to me!


    Ah, the great fear is made known to the world! Honesty equals guilty fear of reciprocation equals hypocritical 'niceness' equals inane babbling in the guise of critique (Wait! Is that what I'm doing! AAARRGGHH!!).

    Nawww. I did suggest replacing 'nice' with 'fine' (which seems more appropriate to judging wine and does have the color of blood; the lifeblood of the poet so cruelly attacked).

    Not bad for a guilt induced meditation.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, it made me smile. All the violent images using the whole "pen as sword" idea, very clever. Just one thing, I'd replace "nice" with "good" in the sixth line... don't really know why, just a gut response I suppose.
    Oh, and I'm sure you've nothing to feel guilty about!
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Peacelizzy | [ Reply to This ]


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