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    dots Submission Name: Wish Who Was Here?dots

    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 696
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1353
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       In truth, who is the enemy? The heart of darkness beats within each of us no?

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    dotsWish Who Was Here?dots

    The smoke burns at the back of my throat
    Conjuring memories of marijauna,
    Back from before I could vote
    When green smoke was my power and coach.
    Now I only puff poison,
    To settle down all my dreams and my hopes -
    My stomach churns at the state of the world,
    Which I watch through sad eyes
    Same as you watch a newly fallen girl.
    Thinkin how its so fucked up that these guys take more
    And make your sunny angel out to be just a whore.
    And I ask what for?
    Do they ever show gratitude?
    No -
    They just ply her with trinkets and platitudes
    That be the attitude
    I see at elections
    A bunch of hard-ons plotting on their erections.
    Dereliction - of duty -
    That would be mine
    Were I to just ease back and say I thought it was fine
    Hell its not like she was a virgin anyway,
    Mother-Earth's been got down on so many days.
    In many ways,
    My brothers were bred for incest
    With an absentee father telling them they were the best -
    That they would have dominion -
    And that it would be heresy to speak another opinion.
    So I used to only speak at times I was binging
    Weed all in me mixed with heinies and gin and -
    Whatever else I could use to fill my head
    Cuz to be honest - I wished I was dead.
    But now I'm all sober
    And lo, the dream still ain't over,
    In an energy crisis but still the rich buy Rovers
    I push my lawn-mower and ask what can I do?
    Do you go for them before they're coming for you?
    I have dreams of standing on stage,
    Bringing the crowd in tune to what I feel is a righteous rage,
    The Feelings of an Age.
    For I believe in this great experiment.
    And people speak of the end but I just don't believe we're nearing it.
    I wonder can I speak up above the static?
    Of a whole nation disillusioned, of a time so tragic
    With violence feeling so damn automatic -
    The reaction's become plastic and the reflexes spastic,
    Poorly acted.
    Cuz now everyone's a rapper -
    And everyone'll shoot you dead
    I try my best, to root through my head,
    It was upon Martin that I was bred and fed.
    I say give peace a chance
    Lest the streets run red,
    With the blood of soldiers fighting what's left unsaid:
    A heart of darkness, hands of steel, and a brain of wood
    Please I hope you know I really would if I could
    Gather up all the wounded and somehow,
    Try to make good.
    In the suburbs, in the country, and up in the hood
    Maybe I could if I would?
    Lord knows I think we all should
    Put out the flames before we're covered in soot,
    Ash and grime.
    Ladies and gentlemen
    And its upon us!
    If part of you is still honest
    Stand with me and make a promise:
    I will leave this place better than I met it!
    Even if I have to reset it
    On that you can bet it:
    The farm, your life, whatever else
    And speaking like this isn't so good for my health -
    One day I know they'll make me bleed -
    But until then I've got to do what I think we all need:
    I've got to talk about all the inconsistencies with the Towers
    About how my president is killing the seperation of Powers
    About how corporations are raping in my name -
    About how I really know you feel the same,
    Deep down inside
    Back in that same place you used to hide
    When your parents were arguing and the world was too wide
    This shit isn't about sides -
    This is about the human race not trying suicide
    About not taking another long ride.
    And for every politician who lied to get elected
    Every officer who stood by while massacres directed
    To every person who watched the news and pretended they're unconnected,
    I wish, oh I wish ya'll were here...

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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this. Its' frickin sweet. It's jam-packed with quotable lines, and the rhythm is so strong that you can bob your head while reading it silently. I think my favorite line though is the bit about Mother Earth getting down in so many ways....just an interesting picture, lol. A+
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great - I need to read it again to be sure, but I think I love it!

    "Please I hope you know I really would if I could
    Gather up all the wounded and somehow,
    Try to make good.
    In the suburbs, in the country, and up in the hood
    Maybe I could if I would?" This bit really struck me, so many bits really struck me. I think it says a lot about where we are today, as individuals and as a society.

    I'll bet it sounds awesome when you perform it as well!
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Peacelizzy | [ Reply to This ]

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