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    dots Submission Name: Insidedots

    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1052
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 444

       I wrote this thinking about the creepy basement at work and then it turned into something completely different.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    As I stare down into darkness,
    my heart begins to pound.
    I know that in this place,
    I could effortlessly drown.

    I could lose myself to evil,
    in this freezing hole of fear
    I could die again forever
    and not a soul would hear.

    What lies inside this void
    I'll guess I'll never know
    for there are rooms inside my heart
    where even I won't go.

    Submitted on 2006-06-17 11:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fav...I love it...The last stanza is my fav. I can relate..I don't know if that is a good or bad thing, but I can...It's short but full of meaning...:)
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by Kisseddirt | [ Reply to This ]
      *Beautiful*. Even if it's short it's got essence. I loved the last stanza. ^_^. *Faves* I like the rhyming too.
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      We all have our demons,
    We all have our fears,
    Thus no one is safe,
    In these tiresome years.

    Your poem has inspired my muse with its simplicity and effectivness. Loved it for its truth rather than its poetic structure.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a new fave! Its short but full of meaning. I really loved it, keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't expect this from you, even though you said was dark. I liked it, but it was little too short for my tastes. ^_^ But there was a lot of meaning...and next time make Carrie gown down the stairs first!

    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice... perhaps you have some hidden demons somewhere in your mind..or heart. I enjoyed the little bit of rhyme scheme you had going on.
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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