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    dots Submission Name: byedots
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    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 815
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 407



    Description:
       this was borne from a fight i had with a very close friend. maybe that little bit of info might help yall understand.


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    So long, good-bye, is that what you wanted me to say? I left you, you left me and now there is night during day, I love you, you love me, but our emotions are not the same, and I am truly sorry for causing you so much disdain, I understand if you push me away, and until the day you want me back in the darkness is where ill lay, but ill dream all through this “night”, ill dream of my one and only light.




    Submitted on 2006-06-17 13:01:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry you're feeling this, and as you said about my write, I can relate in a relative sense, It's a shame that no one seems to want to comment on this, becuz aside from the format slowing it down a little it was one hell of an awesome write, and in so few words, you described what you, me and who knows how many other ppl are feeling so perfectly. wow, god I can't finish this comment to the extent I should, I'm sorry, very very great write.
    peace
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the reason the poem is so good because it potrays so many true feelings that everyone has so everyone can relate and understand to some point at least. It's such a good write. I'll have to check out more of your writes because the ones i saw have been excelllent.
    PeAcE
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]


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