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    dots Submission Name: Sorrydots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1087
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    dotsSorrydots
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    Why am I
    so quick to say
    whatever comes to
    tongue or pen? I'm on
    a clock that ticks and tocks
    and never stops and can't reverse,
    making me regret and say
    Please give it back
    I'm sorry, sorry,
    sorry.





    Submitted on 2006-06-17 16:01:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good -- once again. Your writing style is very refreshing and original. While your subject-matter in this particular piece can't exactly be described as sunshiney-bright, you've completely avoided sounding emo or unoriginal. My only complaint is that you left out the "l" in "please in your second line. What language is timbus, anyway?
    -Syd
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Otter Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is really neat. I like this a lot. Wow, this is very original, and a good way to describe poetry as something that's deep inside your heart that you didn't even realize you were writing through poetry, but now that you realize all you want to do is get it back. This is really good, I like it a lot, and I think it's really creative of you to mention how when you write, a part of you gets out that you didn't want anyone to see, or maybe you didn't even know was there, and now it's all shameful, and all you want to do is get it back from the reader sand tuck it away safely in the land of your mind that has never been wandered.
    "Why am I
    so quick to say
    whatever comes to
    tongue or pen?"
    Is my favorite line. Great job to yah.
    Peace,love,euphoria
    Aya
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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