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    dots Submission Name: Rag Dolldots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 740
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1472



    Description:
       basically about being in an abusive type of relationship, and seeing how it effects others and yourself, but not being able to do much about it. don't know why you won't leave, or how you find the strength to stay but you do.


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    dotsRag Dolldots
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    Verse 1:
    some people don't feel any pain
    when they're thrown to the ground
    and kicked over and over again
    but i am not one of those people
    cause just one push from you
    breaks my heart into millions
    but yet i find the strengh to stay

    Chorus:
    and i feel like i'm a rag doll
    cause i don't feel a thing
    when you rip me open
    to throw my insides out
    and sew me shut again
    it's you who's made me this way
    when i sacrificed my empty heart to you

    Verse 2:
    some people don't feel anything
    when they have been brought down
    and made to feel like nothing
    but i am not one of those people
    cause just one word from you
    breaks me and my self-confidence
    i don't know why i choose to stay

    Chorus

    Verse 3:
    some people don't do anything
    when they've been thrown away
    and then brought back the same day
    and i am one of these people
    cause just one touch from you
    oh fills me up with excitment
    and i, i run right back to you

    Chorus x2

    Coda:
    and i feel like i'm a rag doll
    cause i don't feel a thing
    when you rip me open
    to throw my insides out
    and sew me shut again





    Submitted on 2006-06-17 19:04:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      THis is a good pice, I've seen better from you but this contains so much emotion. My favorite part is
    Verse 3:
    some people don't do anything
    when they've been thrown away
    and then brought back the same day
    and i am one of these people
    cause just one touch from you
    oh fills me up with excitment
    and i, i run right back to you

    Good Write Kriss, keep it up. Hope things get better.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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