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    dots Submission Name: Rotten Angelsdots
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    Author: Gmann
    ASL Info:    19/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 98/125/73
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Dark
    Total Views: 146
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1002



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    dotsRotten Angelsdots
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    porcilen skin and rose red lips
    sky blue eyes and carless hips
    it was her purness that drew the sin
    she bore scares in her heart
    and showed on her skin
    her flawless features had been cut again

    gothic beauty, elegant and fair
    with blood red roses in ebony hair

    soft black lave to covor her chest
    long blach skirt to hide her legs
    black eyliner to dull the eyes
    make up to concil the bruses she hides

    black heart, black tears
    "its she who lives without any fears"
    pestamistic, nastacistic
    "her dark world revolves around her"

    she was empty praying to be full
    then she relizes she is full of emptyness

    its a cruel world, its a cruel joke
    be a beauty who lives carefree
    in a box of her own making

    where the sun never shines
    the moon never sets
    and we are all left to dream




    Submitted on 2006-06-17 22:29:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the imagery in it, the descriptive words you used and the way it sounded like a bit of a story. I liked the ending. ^_^

    I was just kind of confused with what the structure really is and punctuation marks would really help for a smoother read..at least that is for me..Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      wow man ..excellent description , i'm so touched with it , i'm so adding it to my favorites , there's a few spelling errors , you should correct them . i like the depth of the description , i like all of it ..awesome work

    ~~drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      was it just me? I got a few different aspects of it...
    1. b/c of the title i thought you were talking of an angel
    2. the angel is actually a very beautiful girl
    3. bruises, and the world...

    u switched across styles which i didn't like b/c it threw my reading off every time

    overall, i agree w/ the others
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by sailorliones | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very creative writing and I'm glad I happen to come across it. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
    | Posted on 2006-07-02 00:00:00 | by Slit | [ Reply to This ]



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