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    dots Submission Name: My Last Poemdots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1153
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       Thanks Maritza!!! Thanks Alot!!!

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    dotsMy Last Poemdots

    I've never been good at life,
    I gave up several hopes and dreams,
    I no longer live to strive,
    My reality,
    Wasn't what it seemed.

    I hate my life so plenty,
    My anger stresses out,
    I was born without a penny,
    And now I'm rich with doubt.

    These are my last verses,
    I'm sorry it came to this,
    But life is who I'm versus,
    And now I'm fucking pissed.

    My last words are present here,
    No more striving to be good,
    The end is almost near,
    I know nobody understood.

    I hear my words in the distance,
    I'm no longer here to shine,
    As I say good bye putting no resistance,
    These become my last lines.

    Submitted on 2004-05-13 20:55:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i reals hope this aint your last poem ever coz i sure like your stuff. so keep breathing and keep writing and get your pissed'ness out! ciao for now
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      You are completely wrong if you think your not good at anything. I like this writing better than my own. Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by Ensult | [ Reply to This ]
      last lines... it almost reimdns be of battle lines, so not only is it the speaker's last lines of verse, but his last fight as well... the last lines.... very meaningful phrase in any light. Write more ~.^ and love your woman! lol... ~Coranna
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]

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