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Crying Eyes


Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /I am dead inside
Total Views: 1332
Average Vote:    5.0000
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someone I know is depressed. I could tell when I met them because of they're eyes. Im not sure


Crying Eyes



Your eyes are grey,
and dry as bones.
The shades are dark,
in different tones.

I can read,
what is in your head.
But your eyes seem to tell me,
that you are dead.

Everytime i see you,
you seem to be crying.
But no tears are shead,
because you might be dying.

You slit your arm,
but leave your wrist.
Your afraid to die,
but you hardly exist.

You are the empty shell,
of a broken friend.
Still untill your gone,
you will play pretend..




Submitted on 2006-06-18 15:39:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  in the words of my friend mindy who just read this n loves it, we both agree that this poem is absolutly positivly kickass! wow that was beautifly written! i can defiantly relate!
maddie
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]
  wow...i really like this one....its so sad but i like it.......very nice
| Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ]
  omg... wow... im like speachless. that is awsome keep that up..

<333 theoneforgotten
| Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]


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