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    dots Submission Name: river of eventsdots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       this write is about what is going on between me and a friend.

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    dotsriver of eventsdots

    I can see now where this is going
    Like a light in front of my eyes
    And this river of events keeps flowing
    At the end of it is my demise

    Put I pray that you can forgive me
    And I hope you wont let me drift down
    But I understand if you choose to let me be
    And let me sink and drown

    But if I die I hope you know that I love you
    And I would do anything to see you smile
    And if that means I have to leave you
    It will make your smile more worthwhile

    So I hope when this water overtakes me
    No matter the path you choose
    Whether it is to save or kill me
    I hope you'll win not lose.....

    Submitted on 2006-06-18 15:46:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poems speaks of strong devotion, and the power emotions brought on by conflict....its a nice metaphore, and makes for a pretty good read.
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      cooooll.that ur a good friend.and i hope things get better between u and ur friend.
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]

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