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In my Arms


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I want kids when I get married. I love babies. I can't wait 'til the day that I get to look down at that beautiful baby in my arms.


In my Arms



In my arms, you are safe
Safe from any harm
In my arms you are loved
Loved until the end
In my arms, you are innocent
You have the world ahead of you
In my arms, you are cared about
You will always have someone to turn to
In my arms you are my present
One that I will treasure forever




Submitted on 2006-06-18 19:45:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love poetry about children. I have quite a few poems written about my kids...
Anyway, you captured the feelings a mother has toward her child very nicely. You have a good eye.
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]


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