Description: i wanted to make the reader feel as if one were there. and feeling the inner peace just by watching someone go thru REM. and then as their eyes open and their dream ends so does your's...
Sunrises and Bedsheets -------------------------------------------
Waking up next to you
Your vivacious red hair covering the whitest pillow
The sunlight pouring into the room.
This room where ever colour was white except for your colours capturing my attension.
Your lashes fluttering to your dreams.
Every strand of light
Reminding me of humanity
The beautiful flaws of humanity.
The uniquiness to your eyes as they open to the white room.
The curtains flutter as the new day's breeze greets us.
Nothing ever felt so
Your parting lips break the silence
Speak my only colour
As the words spill
I hear you say,
"I have to go".
The poem was beutiful, really, really beautiful. But this line: "This room where ever colour was white except for your colours capturing my attension." was just a bit long and kind of breaks up the flow of the rest of it. Not that it matters any, the poem is stil beautiful, just thought I'd let you know.
:( *crys* why so blue my darling booger queen? I miss you and I know I keep posting on all your poems with "i miss you"s but I can't help it. I'm sorry...I love this poem, but I wonder who it's about, I have a good idea, but I'm not sure... love you, Rose Macabre
hey..i know what you thought when you read the one where i said all the bad things about you and what you did and used the whore word and stuff but it wasnt like that. i wasnt trying to blame you, i was blaming me for blaming you...sweet poem. different.