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Author: Restless_Heart
Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 44 /35 /16
Words: 55
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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A little shorter than regular for me but ohh well.


Complextion muffeled by saddened eyes,
Secrets revealed by open minds,
One thing you can not control,
Would be the secrets you hide,
Because everytime you shy away,
It tells me how much more you are afraid,
Otherwise you wouldn't turn away,
Everytime I look to your face,
Trying to find something,
That everyone needs.

Submitted on 2006-06-19 00:50:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hiding, it sucks. Sometimes people hide secrets, even from themselves, which is kind of weird, but eh..I know that when someone starts getting close to me, I back away, and close up completely, I hate it..but I can't control it..But some people know what your thinking, they can read your movements, and just figure out that thing that poeple "need"..Love, perhaps?Anyways, I liked this piece a lot..You could've expanded on it, but erm it was okay like this. Short but to the point, liked it.
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]

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