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    dots Submission Name: ROOM 111dots
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    Author: Ligeia83
    ASL Info:    23/f/the literary world
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 17/14/13
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 156
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 681



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    dotsROOM 111dots
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    Cirlces of the Inferno-
    And the Moon-
    Dark-Heavy-Sick
    It envelops me-thick
    My back-debris
    My hands shaking
    reading-between the lines
    of the unsaid-
    This is-Life-Unclear
    Uncut-
    And you are standing there
    Looking for her-
    Or, are you not?
    I don't mind you wasting my time
    Unclear-
    I wish that's what I'd hear
    From You-
    Lose Your mind-Lose Yourself
    (in Me)
    Was it deep?
    It sure will be-For real
    Something so Unclear
    For Real,For Real,For Real...




    Submitted on 2006-06-19 10:43:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Shyt girl, you got some skillage. I like this, it's deffinately art, that's for sure. I"ve no idea what, if any relevance rm111 has, but that doesn't hold much relevance. It's slightly obscure, but not so obscure you loose the interest of the reader, due to lack of comprehension. However I do feel this would benefit from a different format, It casn be that much better, but mabye you presented it exactly as you wanted it, I don't know, I just know my take. nice
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the poems format...and if I'm not mistaken...are you refering to the torture room in 1984? Because I can't remember if that's room 101, or room 111. Hey, maybe its yours is the room down the hall where the torture is purely poetic and emotional. anyhow, i have nothing but praise for this...i don't have any constructive criticism, good write
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]



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