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    dots Submission Name: Cageddots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 886
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 457



    Description:
       I canot find a good title for this poem really. any ideas?


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    dots Cageddots
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    I blamed it all,
    to lose the burden.
    I watched it fall,
    from a distance.

    I cannot escape it,
    forever in dark.
    with lights never lit,
    im helpless.

    It's my fears,
    that hold me down.
    I've run for years,
    It stays.

    There is no direction,
    other than down.
    there is no protection,
    from myself.







    Submitted on 2006-06-19 12:57:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't agree with the fist person you should name your poem whatever the hell you want. It was awesome. The title may not be original but it still fits.

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    FreeBird
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
      how very true, someone had to have a poem for that feeling of mine :)
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      I would suggest changing the title because it's a bit chliche' for me. But this was a pretty cool poem.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem man! Dont change a thing only people who cant understand would tell you to
    stay true and your work will live on forever
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]


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