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Hello can you hear me?

Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 165
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Letting go of someone who died....

Hello can you hear me?

Hello can you hear me?
I want to see you again
You meant so much to me
You were my only friend

Hello can you hear me?
I have so much to say
Why did you leave me?
Why did you go away?

Hello can you hear me?
I need you here right now
I don't think I can move on
I just don't see how

Hello can you hear me?
You always made me smile
I want to see you again
If only for a while

Hello can you hear me?
I feel empty inside
Now that you've left me
Life is one scary ride

Hello can you hear me?
I know you had no choice
still, I miss you so much
I want so badly to hear your voice

Hello can you hear me?
Even though I want to cry
I have to let you go now
I have to say goodbye

Submitted on 2006-06-19 13:35:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is so sad
I immediately thought of my Mema(grandma) reading this and how I often said the same words to her after she has passed on
The truth is even though she passed away 17 years ago we still talk every day
She lives forever in my Heart and guides me moving forward
Her Love will never leave me just like the Love you shared with this person will never leave you
I Loved This
What I really like about your poetry is it is true heartfelt emotion
That is so rare in poetry anymore
God Bless
Your Friend

How is everything else with you
I hope you and your family are doing well
| Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds to me like you are speaking of a friend who moved away. I thought the sentiment in this was nice. The poem is clear, and not overly flowery or wordy. The rhyme is simple. Nice work.
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]

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