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    dots Submission Name: Powers we Posessdots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I do realize that the word power is used alot in this poem, but there is a reason for it. The whole point of it is to show just how powerful we are, in all ways, but that having these powers is a weakness that causes all problems, caused because we can't control most of them or because we don't use them wisely. Taking advantage of powers is what it should show, so please, don't rag on me about how many times I used the word power okies hehe.

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    dotsPowers we Posessdots

    The power to move, feel, love and learn.
    To laugh, cry, hurt, and move on.

    The power to damage, lie, cheat and steal.
    To give, make peace, love and heal.

    The power to reject, deny, and to ignore.
    To control, take over, and so much more.

    We have the power to do what we desire,
    Except to let our own powers expire.

    To posess these powers is strongest of all,
    Our greatest weakness, our biggest downfall.

    The world will not end because of anything else,
    Other than lacking ability to control powers we posess.

    Submitted on 2006-06-19 13:36:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha as everyone said the concept is very clever and original it reminds me of something i wrote called THE 5 SENSES OF MANKIND OR WAR? its pretty much the same written scheme. check it out if you have time. later

    - kase
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely, many people think that just because they can't make a change about themselves or "move a Mountain' that they have no power, but us humans are a very powerful creature. Great write

    much love
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very prophetic! you didn't use "power" too much... you used it to "compare and contrast" the things you are expressing in the essence of what power truly is...brilliant! i loved it!
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the concept of this poem and the way you set up the first three stanzas. Your rhyme scheme seems a little off in the first and last stanza though and the last line is somewhat awkward because it is so long. Overall though, I thought it was great and the beginning is very powerful. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]

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