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My Sister

Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Dedicated to my sister Ashley. But also for my younger sister, Megan.

My Sister

With a heart filled with love
she was sent to me from up above
She is my sister, who I love very much
Who cheers me up when I am sad
Who can always make me smile
Who will always be with me
Whether she likes it or not

Submitted on 2006-06-19 14:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh how sweet. I also wanted alittle sister instead I got stuck with an evil little brother that breaks things and bites and pulls hair. All that little brother stuff. He is also a tattle tale. It's wonderful to have someone you know will always be there for you when things are good or bad. Someone to talk to a spend time with even though you don't always get along.Wonderful job with this one. You're an amazin writer.

I really like the ending it's sweet.

| Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a really sweet poem of love. I wish I could have had a brother or sister to love like that but it is so awsome that you love your sister or sisters enough to write a beautiful poem like this. In any family no matter what size an important lesson must be learned to love the ones on the inside (of your home) just the same if not more than those outside sometimes as a family we forget that, but u seem to have that concept down well.

Sorry you haven't heard from me in a long time there actually is no excuse or explanation ........... so you get to punch me in the face for free lol
much LOVE
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwww, sometimes I wish I woulda had an honest to goodness sister. But, I do have some younger friends whom I consider little sisters and would honest to God, kill anyone that messed with them.

This was beautiful and refreshing to read. You're a talented writer. Very mature for your age I can tell.

Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read!
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, I love this! The ending has this additude about it. Made me smile, heh. Very nice, though short, it fits the meaning well. Nicely done.

| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Vanna Arden | [ Reply to This ]
  It's always a blessing when you're close to your sister, and you know that your sister is there for you, even when she really dosen't want to be.

This is short, but definately to the point. It was sweet and a very nice tribute to your sister.

| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]

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