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    dots Submission Name: Do U Like It Like Thisdots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 452
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 857
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2748



    Description:
       alright this is the rough draft to my song. Any Advice tell me please. I don't want to change the feel of the song i just need a few pointers on how u think this song could better itself


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    dotsDo U Like It Like Thisdots
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    (spoken)
    baby come here
    sit down
    i know you had a long day
    lay back...and relax..
    and tell me do u like it like...
    this

    (verse)
    baby come here (come here)
    baby take your seat (take your seat)
    tonight is differnt from the rest
    you'll experince ecstasy
    I need you to relax
    as i kiss you from head to toe
    other nights are hard and fast
    tonight we'll go nice and slow
    as i take off your clothes
    does this turn you on
    we'll make beatiful music tonight
    i'ma make a brand new song
    i'm siting on your lap
    slowly pushing you back
    as i start it with a kiss
    baby do you like it like this

    (Bridge)
    take your time
    tonight your mine
    not stress tonight i'ma relax your mind
    take it slow
    let me know
    and tell me

    (chours)
    do u like it like this
    let me kiss you to the floor
    any way that you want it
    ride ya real slow
    let me know that u want this
    and do u like it like this
    i'ma show u i'm in love
    baby showin u so much love
    its for you
    and do u like it this
    i'll give it anyway that u need
    cater 2 u baby
    (oh oh) but do u like it like this
    makeing love to you all night
    as i'm singing you this song
    it's for you baby

    (Verse 2)
    as the water
    hits our skin
    this feels to good to be good
    it's the sweetest sin
    oh let me rub all over your body
    oh oh showing u why u chose me
    oh my lips on you nothing amiss
    no other girl can do u like this....
    they can't kiss you from head to toe
    and this postion they don't know
    back to the basics is fine
    i know you like 69...
    but baby do u like it like this

    (Bridge)
    take your time
    tonight your mine
    not stress tonight i'ma relax your mind
    take it slow
    let me know
    and tell me

    (chours)
    do u like it like this
    let me kiss you to the floor
    any way that you want it
    ride ya real slow
    let me know that u want this
    and do u like it like this
    i'ma show u i'm in love
    baby showin u so much love
    its for you
    and do u like it this
    i'll give it anyway that u need
    cater 2 u baby
    (oh oh) but do u like it like this
    makeing love to you all night
    as i'm singing you this song
    it's for you baby




    Submitted on 2006-06-19 17:58:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was ok i wouldnt change any words though
    i am not sure what music category it falls in though i wouldnt say explicit or rock maybe a pop song
    anywaz well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i bet ur boyfriend's pretty happy with u. lol. yeah i think this would be a really good song even though they couldn't even play it on the radio.
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      That was AMAZING! I loved it. It was a great song.

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought it was Good. IT started out reall slow but then verse 2 really stepped it up. AS a song wit the right beat and melody to the lyrics it could be a good song.

    Do you sing by the way??

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I can just see a video for this play in my mind. Talk about sexy! I loved the lyrics. I can't see anything to change really. I personally hear a fast song when I read this, with a mix of slow and fast dance moves. Great R&B feel. Now all you have to do is give Lil' John or Snoop a call.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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