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Do U Like It Like This


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 452
Class/Type: Lyrics /Passion
Total Views: 1234
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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alright this is the rough draft to my song. Any Advice tell me please. I don't want to change the feel of the song i just need a few pointers on how u think this song could better itself


Do U Like It Like This



(spoken)
baby come here
sit down
i know you had a long day
lay back...and relax..
and tell me do u like it like...
this

(verse)
baby come here (come here)
baby take your seat (take your seat)
tonight is differnt from the rest
you'll experince ecstasy
I need you to relax
as i kiss you from head to toe
other nights are hard and fast
tonight we'll go nice and slow
as i take off your clothes
does this turn you on
we'll make beatiful music tonight
i'ma make a brand new song
i'm siting on your lap
slowly pushing you back
as i start it with a kiss
baby do you like it like this

(Bridge)
take your time
tonight your mine
not stress tonight i'ma relax your mind
take it slow
let me know
and tell me

(chours)
do u like it like this
let me kiss you to the floor
any way that you want it
ride ya real slow
let me know that u want this
and do u like it like this
i'ma show u i'm in love
baby showin u so much love
its for you
and do u like it this
i'll give it anyway that u need
cater 2 u baby
(oh oh) but do u like it like this
makeing love to you all night
as i'm singing you this song
it's for you baby

(Verse 2)
as the water
hits our skin
this feels to good to be good
it's the sweetest sin
oh let me rub all over your body
oh oh showing u why u chose me
oh my lips on you nothing amiss
no other girl can do u like this....
they can't kiss you from head to toe
and this postion they don't know
back to the basics is fine
i know you like 69...
but baby do u like it like this

(Bridge)
take your time
tonight your mine
not stress tonight i'ma relax your mind
take it slow
let me know
and tell me

(chours)
do u like it like this
let me kiss you to the floor
any way that you want it
ride ya real slow
let me know that u want this
and do u like it like this
i'ma show u i'm in love
baby showin u so much love
its for you
and do u like it this
i'll give it anyway that u need
cater 2 u baby
(oh oh) but do u like it like this
makeing love to you all night
as i'm singing you this song
it's for you baby




Submitted on 2006-06-19 17:58:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was ok i wouldnt change any words though
i am not sure what music category it falls in though i wouldnt say explicit or rock maybe a pop song
anywaz well done

sandman
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  i bet ur boyfriend's pretty happy with u. lol. yeah i think this would be a really good song even though they couldn't even play it on the radio.
| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  That was AMAZING! I loved it. It was a great song.

<3 Adalae
| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
  i thought it was Good. IT started out reall slow but then verse 2 really stepped it up. AS a song wit the right beat and melody to the lyrics it could be a good song.

Do you sing by the way??

PC
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! I can just see a video for this play in my mind. Talk about sexy! I loved the lyrics. I can't see anything to change really. I personally hear a fast song when I read this, with a mix of slow and fast dance moves. Great R&B feel. Now all you have to do is give Lil' John or Snoop a call.

Catrina
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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