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    dots Submission Name: Waitdots
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    Author: acapone
    ASL Info:    32mnh
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 24/25/10
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 707
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    Bytes: 411



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    dotsWaitdots
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    Leagions of pain kill my every thought.
    Blood ridden tears plan my burial plot.
    Through my cries of shame I shall die,
    praying to god with my hands to the sky.

    With sounds of shattering maddness flowing through my mind
    I'll consume every bit of insanity I can find
    I can no longer breed this unforgiving hate.
    For god to save me I will wait!




    Submitted on 2006-06-19 19:37:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey man

    Like this one alot. Keep writing. It sounds so bombastic first...then you quite mellowed it down a lil. And the ending was great. I njoyed it.

    D-Ink
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! I really like this one. I can feel all the emotion behind it and great rhyming:) Nice work.
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Mr. Creep | [ Reply to This ]


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