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    dots Submission Name: OrGanSdots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1111
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       my inner cannibal burst out on this one lol.


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    dotsOrGanSdots
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    It was a wretched smell,
    wright away I awake.
    It hit like a bombshell,
    or an instant headache.

    I never smelled this before,
    so I was drawn into the room.
    Then there it was on the floor,
    a disemboweld body releasing fume.

    It left a trail of blood,
    all its insides hanging out.
    eye sockets packed with mud,
    still alive I had no doubt.

    Maggots where it's nose should be,
    and brain slush in its ears.
    I stopped breathing, it looked right at me,
    and captured all my fears.

    I kicked it in the head,
    and boiled its infested skin.
    Now im sure that it is dead,
    because it now lay within:)




    Submitted on 2006-06-19 22:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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