OrGanS

Author: Mr. Creep ASL Info:    16. Female. Here Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112 Words: 116

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OrGanS

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It was a wretched smell, wright away I awake. It hit like a bombshell, or an instant headache. I never smelled this before, so I was drawn into the room. Then there it was on the floor, a disemboweld body releasing fume. It left a trail of blood, all its insides hanging out. eye sockets packed with mud, still alive I had no doubt. Maggots where it's nose should be, and brain slush in its ears. I stopped breathing, it looked right at me, and captured all my fears. I kicked it in the head, and boiled its infested skin. Now im sure that it is dead, because it now lay within:)

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