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OrGanS


Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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my inner cannibal burst out on this one lol.


OrGanS



It was a wretched smell,
wright away I awake.
It hit like a bombshell,
or an instant headache.

I never smelled this before,
so I was drawn into the room.
Then there it was on the floor,
a disemboweld body releasing fume.

It left a trail of blood,
all its insides hanging out.
eye sockets packed with mud,
still alive I had no doubt.

Maggots where it's nose should be,
and brain slush in its ears.
I stopped breathing, it looked right at me,
and captured all my fears.

I kicked it in the head,
and boiled its infested skin.
Now im sure that it is dead,
because it now lay within:)




Submitted on 2006-06-19 22:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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