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    dots Submission Name: Letdots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Let the wind breathe.

    Let water communicate with gurgles and blow bubbles with springing laughter.

    Let it flow.

    Let the sun smile it's warmth into our hearts and
    let the rain shower it's cleansing blessings to flush away the tensions of the day.

    Let us roll like stones and gather no moss.

    Let mud cleanse us.

    Let us spot a sliver of light in darkness.

    Let frustrations melt like snow on a warm spring day.
    Let happiness spread like honey.
    Let clouds come and go

    Let go.

    Submitted on 2006-06-20 06:57:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... This piece is a very brilliant message to the world about what we should all do in our lives, instead of clinging to statis and stagnating we should roll with the punches and allow our world to teach us the lessons of life instead of expecting to be able to watch grass grow and learn something from it, instead of clinging to the thoughts of what we are told we should see, opening our eyes and letting ourselves decide what we see. instead of going with the opinions of the world and its many outlets of mass media, opening our minds and thinking for ourselves. Of course i may be reading into this far more than i should but thats what it feels like to me. thank you for sharing!!

    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, this is nicely done, Kate, but I think you mean "breathe" in line one. A couple of the phrases might be a little common, but you changed them a bit ("Let us roll like stones and gather no moss," for example). You might want to put a comma before "and" in "Let the sun smile it's warmth into our hearts and/ let the rain shower it's cleansing blessings to flush away the tensions of the day."

    I like the positive message in this because there's a lot of negativity on this site. I hope all is well, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

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