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    dots Submission Name: Ballad of the Breathlessdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1036
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Mi song for mi Mama---si, for mi mama en El Salvador!
    Yo Mami yo no tengo hambre


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    dotsBallad of the Breathlessdots
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    Ballad of the Breathless
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    I could but you wouldn’t want me to
    I would but it’d make me too much like you
    So I do the tame thing
    that gets me through the change of the day
    The pains I amuse today,
    cause tomorrow I sustain,
    this breathless fighter
    goes away.

    I never saw it this way.
    Somehow I thought you’d end up with…
    The fight you see today
    The breathless one
    You’ll never see again.

    Time to pretend
    Never again
    my so called friend
    in the end
    maybe
    I’ll catch my breath
    by then…

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2006-06-20 08:57:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a different side of you. One that tends to bust out from behind the curtains every once in a while. Shows the depth of your heart....and compliments the strength of your mind.

    This was written rather beautifully. It had elegance to it...yet in a unique way. The breathless one...... you will see her again. You can see her each day when you allow your mind to explore to a place in which she once stood, and will forever stay standing.

    Nothing in this write needed anything changed in my perspective. I followed along with it quite well. I think that I felt the rhythm just as much as I felt the words that went with it.

    I commend you for this piece!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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