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    dots Submission Name: C Battery Syndromedots
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    Author: The Imbroglio
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 35/53/34
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 976
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 576



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    dotsC Battery Syndromedots
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    Shed some light on my uvula
    Allow me to express myself through countless aches and pains
    One step forward, one step back
    The water is cold and I am too old for commitment
    Your shipment of style arrives
    Healthier than ever yet likely to get a rise out of death
    Your kind is the unkind line
    Up front: delightful
    Down low: disturbed
    Don't ring my Liberty bell at this hour
    Don't bring my soul to burn so early
    Everything costs money my dear
    and sadly, your crop is not "cash"




    Submitted on 2006-06-20 09:01:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow deep but I don't really get the title. I hope tou can explain it to me a little more.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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