I assume you talk about Arabian Jasmine, Duke of Tuscany is a great cultivar, I believe it is Jasminum sambac...well off to the poem...the word rose threw me in the opening, "each petal reaching to the starlight"
there was also the word " Beyond" which does not refer to anything. May i suggest:
Standing proud amongst the greenery Each petal reaching to the starlight as if knowing of it's own worth beyond it's moon-pale petals a fragrance, sweet to the nose, given freely to the night air each leaf quivered in it's mooring as if drunk on the fulsome perfume.
I'd change embrace to embracing change the generation to a generation
So this is a good write, needingm, in my opinion a it of focus in the beginning and a little more allowing the rythm of your thoughts to fall naturally. You have done a good job in the center sectiopn, with septangled and other clever wordings. kept my interest.. koster
Submission Name: Jasmine!!!
