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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 548



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       I didn't know what to call this so I just called it no name...


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    we show them hoes/
    who is the king/
    they out they clothes/
    and in the ring/
    oh now it's on/
    and I"m just bumpin my music/
    so if you gonna test me come on/
    n9ne milli, mayne and I"m dyin' to use it/
    spitting what I feel/
    I kneel, to the god of rap/
    poppin my pills/

    you aint shit, thats a fact
    so could you, please pass the prozac/
    or I'ma push your wig back/
    with the AK, Choppa, yeah, remember that/





    Submitted on 2006-06-20 15:57:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm... this was a little bit strange. I don't really know what to say bout it. What you mean bout they out they clothes and in the ring? U have to tell me what or who u were talkin bout later. Overall good write in my opinion.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      there isn't much to this one. i really wasn't feeling it man. i'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      ab rhyme was good
    the rhymes were simple
    and the flow was descent
    but not a bad post

    keep it up
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      iight good so far...so i'ma wait to read the rest lol.


    DePoetry
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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